The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The average monthly temperatures in three big
cities
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are shown in the graph over a period of 12
months
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It is clear that
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Paris and Dubay had a positive trend in
temperature
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since
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from
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January until August.
By contrast
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, Sydney has a negative trend for the same amount of time. Dubai rose dramatically to a peak of 36
temperature
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in Celcius for the first 8
months
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and
this
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city had the highest
temperature
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compared to other
cities
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. Paris
also
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reached its peak
in
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at
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the same time which was 20
temperature
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in Celcius.Even though Sydney was the hottest city for the first 3
month
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months
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,it started to gradually decrease and ended up being the coldest after 5
months
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later.
However
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,for the
last
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4
months
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,Dubai and Paris lines started gradually declining and resulted
being
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in being
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cold
cities
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.
In contrast
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, Sydney started gently increasing in
temperature
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and overtook those
cities
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being the warmest
in
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at
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the end of year.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, months, temperature with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • line graph
  • trends
  • seasonal variations
  • temperature ranges
  • data points
  • climatic factors
  • latitude
  • correlations
  • anomalies
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • climate zones
  • thermometer readings
  • degrees Celsius/Fahrenheit
  • summertime
  • wintertime
  • meteorological
  • temperate
  • subtropical
  • mercury levels
  • interpolate
  • mean values
  • temperatures soar
  • temperatures plummet
  • heatwave
  • cold snap
  • mild
  • cool
  • warm
  • chilly
  • frigid
  • scorching
  • freezing
  • temperate
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