Write about the following topic. The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

the wifi has many facilities to access to information on the one hand , in our increasingly global
world
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many things have been changed . and one of these things is how to get information about something or get answers
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our questions .
in
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the previous people
have
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to get
a
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books or
asking
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an experts
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to reach
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their answers . as well
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as
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,
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its
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take
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a long time to do that . but nowadays we can get any answer or even any specific
informations
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information
a bout any thing
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about anything
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in the world in just a few minutes . during the
last
a
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few decades many
serch
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search
engines have been founded on
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the internet
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internet
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.
such
as GOOGLE , BRAVE , YOUTUBE and many others ,
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its
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couple
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a couple
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of seconds to access
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info ,
moreover
, latterly it
offer
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offers
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sevral
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several
facilities not just searching
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info , it provide search about pics or videos and even locations .
on the other hand
, the
internet
not
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has not
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just made
seach
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search
about
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something easier but made it more
efficant
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efficient
than ever previously ,
for instance
if you have a post graduate Research you can access
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unlimited sources from independent sites authorised by
thoes
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those
engines .
besides
that the
internet
made
the
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communication easier too , there
is
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a lot of apps like WHATSAPP , VIBER ,
INSTGRAM
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INSTAGRAM
and more than 20 thousand different social media apps ,
people
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and people
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use these apps to interact and communicate
each
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other . on the whole , the
internet
made phenomenal changes in
Humans
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daily
life
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, in my
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the
internet
is the best gift for humanity .
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Coherence and Cohesion
You should start your essay with an introduction that paraphrases the essay topic and provides a thesis statement. This helps in setting up the context for your discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs have a clear topic sentence and that each point is followed by relevant examples and detailed explanations. This can improve the logical structure and coherence in your essay.
Task Achievement
Proofread your essay to correct grammar and spelling mistakes. This will improve the clarity of your ideas and make your essay more comprehensive.
Task Achievement
Incorporate more specific examples or personal experiences to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and make it more persuasive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Include a conclusion that summarizes the main points of your essay and restates your opinion. This will make your essay feel complete and well-rounded.
Task Achievement
You presented your ideas and main points clearly. Good job!
Task Achievement
You've discussed both the positive aspects of internet access to information and provided some relevant points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your ideas flow logically from one point to the next, which helps the reader follow your arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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