The chart below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all which may be unhealty if eaten too much.

The chart below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all which may be unhealty if eaten too much.
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Three pie
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illustrate
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consumption
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the consumption
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of
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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at
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four different
type
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types
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of
meal
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; breakfast, lunch dinner and snacks in the USA.
Additionaly
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consumption
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human
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health
if eaten too much. Units measured in
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Overall
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sodium
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percentage
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contributes mostly at dinner, 43% saturated fat
ratio
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constituted mostly at dinner too, 37%, added
sugar
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percentage
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represented mostly in snacks, 42%. To closer look, at breakfast
sodium
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consumption
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ratio
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comprised 14% per cent, soil fat and added
sugar
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consumption
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ratio
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made up 16% per cent. At lunch,
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sodium
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the sodium
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consumption
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ratio
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contributes 29%
percentage
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and similar to
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,
saturated
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the saturated
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fat
consumption
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ratio
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contributes 26%
percentage
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, added
sugar
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consumption
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is less than two other nutrients,
its
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only 29% per cent during
the
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apply
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lunch time
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lunchtime
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In contrast
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sodium
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and saturated fat
consumption
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percentage
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percentages
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is
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similar if they eat snacks, it is 14% and 21% relatively, despite added
sugar
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, sodium, sugar, percentage, ratio with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrient
  • percentage
  • prevalent
  • trend
  • comparison
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • implications
  • balanced (intake)
  • unhealthy
  • meal times
  • observations
  • habits
  • average
  • highlight
  • analyze
  • draw comparisons
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