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Some architects prioritize the preservation of historical buildings, while others focus on creating new designs. Which perspective do you most agree with, and why? Support your answer with reasons and examples.

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Some
architects
 like to preserve
the
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historial
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historic
historical
buildings
,
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 because they like to love and talk
with
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old
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 history.
While some
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architects
 like to create new designs because they like to implement their creativity.
Firstly
,Many
Architects
 like to preserve historical
buildings
 because these
buildings
contains
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the
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historical
values
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value
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 and people like to visit and explore
such
the
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building
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buildings
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 and places.
On the other hand
,there are
architects
 who like to shape the
buildings
according to
 the modern era.
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example
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 Burj Ul Khalifa is the tallest building
of
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 the the world. In conclusion,Both styles of preserving and creating new designs contribute to
the
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society in different ways and each of them has
their
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its
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 own values and benefits.
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
Ensure you fully elaborate on both perspectives in more detail to show a deeper understanding of the issue. Provide stronger and more relevant examples that directly support your main points.
content
You have identified two distinct perspectives: preserving historical buildings and creating new designs.
clarity
You provide a clear distinction between the two perspectives.

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