You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter. • Describe the problem with the equipment • Explain how this problem is affecting your work • Say what you want the shop or company to do

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with

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that I purchased from your agency. The computer that I have bought from your company and at the worked in my home I discovered some problems which that computer’s monitor did not work. You told me it has

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three years.

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all of the work

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punished by my chairman and it

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bad

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impact on my mood,

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been full day

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work.

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utilized plenty of energy. I want to refund

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all the money I spent on your laptop not only the money was the problem or give another notebook in order to compensate. I look forward to your reply and resolution to my problem. Yours faithfully, Ozod Umarqulov

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coherence cohesion

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance readability.

task achievement

Enhance your task response by providing more specific details about the problem and its impact on your work. Clarify how the computer malfunctioned and give more context on the importance of the lost project.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriately formal for a business letter.

task achievement

The writing tone is politely assertive, which is suitable for formal communication about a complaint.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

157 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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