You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter. • Describe the problem with the equipment • Explain how this problem is affecting your work • Say what you want the shop or company to do
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with
computer
that I purchased from your agency.
The computer that I have bought from your company and at the worked in my home I discovered some problems which that computer’s monitor did not work. You told me it has Add an article
a computer
the computer
guarantee
Add an article
a guarantee
for
three years.
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of
Firstly
, I was producing the essential project, then
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and then
my
all of the work Correct pronoun usage
apply
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. Add a missing verb
was deleted
Therefore
, I am
punished by my chairman and it Wrong verb form
was
was
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had
bad
impact on my mood, Add an article
the bad
a bad
then
I have
been full day Wrong verb form
had
like
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with
this
temper. Furthermore
, I have commence
replying Change the verb form
commenced
this
work. Change preposition
to this
Finally
, after one day I have
done but I Wrong verb form
had
am
utilized plenty of energy.
I want to refund Unnecessary verb
apply
my
all the money I spent on your laptop not only the money was the problem or give another notebook in order to compensate.
I look forward to your reply and resolution to my problem.
Yours faithfully,
Ozod UmarqulovCorrect pronoun usage
apply
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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure, make sure to clearly separate the problem description, its effects, and your desired resolution into distinct paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance readability.
task achievement
Enhance your task response by providing more specific details about the problem and its impact on your work. Clarify how the computer malfunctioned and give more context on the importance of the lost project.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately formal for a business letter.
task achievement
The writing tone is politely assertive, which is suitable for formal communication about a complaint.