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The pie charts compare the percentage of users across different age groups on Twitter, Facebook, and YouTube

The pie charts compare the percentage of users across different age groups on Twitter, Facebook, and YouTube
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The diagrams show how often three social
media
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 apps- Twitter,
Facebook
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, and
YouTube
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- are used among five distinct age groups.
Overall
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,
people
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 aged between 18 and 49 predominantly
use
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 social
media
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, with
Facebook
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 and
YouTube
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 being mostly used among
people
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 aged between 35 and 49,
while
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 youth (18-34) Twitter. The lowest percentages of usage were reported regarding seniors (65+). Middle-aged individuals (35-49) who make up almost one-third of
Facebook
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 users are the dominant figure in terms of
Facebook
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use
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, with the second highest percentage of users being youth (29%). Other older age groups,
people
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 aged 50-64 and 65+
use
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this
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 app least as opposed to other social
media
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, at 19% and 8%, respectively. Children,
on the other hand
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, make
use
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 of
Facebook
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 (14%) almost as much as they do
YouTube
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 (15%). In regard to
YouTube
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 consumption, just like
Facebook
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, its main consumers are middle-aged
people
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, at 29% and young ones, at 26%.
While
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 50-64 aged users constitute a fifth of
overall
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 usage, the oldest contribute to only half of the
last
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 figure (10%) As for Twitter, it is the platform of youth as 40% of its consumers are aged between 18 and 34. The following highest common consumption is made up by middle-aged, at 29% which is the same as their
YouTube
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 usage. Among the oldest and youngest individuals,
this
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 app was least consumed, at 4% and 9 % compared to the other means of social
media
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,
while
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this
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 figure is pretty much the same for senior individuals (18%) regarding all three apps.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words media, facebook, people, use, youtube with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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