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You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college adminisllator. In your letter • say which part-time course you booked • explain why you need to cancel your booking • ask about booking a different course Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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I am writing
this
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 letter in
regards
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 to the
The
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Health and Safety
Course
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 which I just booked a week ago at Sheridan College. Unfortunately, I do not require
this
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course
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 any more . I recently got a new job and
pursing
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this
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course
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 side by side wouldn't be easy for me. I would like to
opt out
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from
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 the
course
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 as of now and would like to gain more
know
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knowledge regarding
Computer
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the Computer
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 System Technician
Course
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 as it
much
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aligns with my current job. Please book me for
this
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course
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instead
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 of the previous one. I would really
appriciate
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appreciate
if
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 you
can
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 send me the details of the
course
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 and can help me
enroll
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enrol
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 as soon as possible. I hope you will understand, and will allow me to exchange the
course
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 Thank you Darsh

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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure, ensure that each idea transitions smoothly to the next. Use linking phrases such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', 'In addition', or 'However'.
task achievement
Pay attention to minor grammatical errors and typos such as 'know knowledge' instead of 'knowledge' and 'appriciate' instead of 'appreciate'. Proofread your work for such errors.
task achievement
The letter follows a clear structure and addresses all parts of the task prompt effectively.
task achievement
Your polite and respectful tone is thoroughly appropriate for formal communication.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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