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The diagram below presents the life cycle of a lady bird and its anatomy. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The illustration depicts Lady Bird’s life cycle and the structure of its body.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the ladybug we know is the image of it when it grew up. Moving to a more detailed analysis, the development of
life
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the life
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 of
this
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 creature consists of 4 stages. First of all, it starts from egg level when the eggs lay on the leaf
from
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for
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 2 to 5 days.
Then
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, it turns to pupa getting 7 days. In the second
level
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level,
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 ladybug’s size enlarges. In the third
stage
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stage,
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 it turns
to
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into
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larva
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a larva
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 which has 6 small legs in 21 days. The next and
last
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 degree is
adult
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the adult
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 one. Its body changes a lot becoming rounded form and appears spots. Turns to Lady Bird’s anatomy, the physique contains
black
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a black
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 head, linked to it
2
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with 2
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antennas and eyes,
in addition
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the
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to the
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 body and head connected with
pronotum
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the pronotum
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 and 2 front legs. The next is
circular
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a circular
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 abdomen which
covered
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is covered
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 with red wings with black spots and 4 hind legs in
this
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 part. Ladybug’s corpus’s left and right sides are parallel.

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