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Writing Samples
Band 4

Research has shown that the transportation of products and people are the main source of pollution. Some people believe government should be in charge of this, while others believe it is the fault of individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Research has presented that
the
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apply
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people
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 and transfer products are the major
polution
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pollution
 source,
someone
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some
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thinks
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think
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 that
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government
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the government
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 should be
in responce
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responsible
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 for
this
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,
while
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 others say that it is the fault of workers. The
government
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 can not control all processes,
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however
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however,
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 I think that
all
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if all
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 processes
is
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are
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 on workers
then
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their
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they
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 are to blame. On the one hand, there are
people
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 blaming
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government
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the government
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, but
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government
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the government
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 can not have authority over all processes and work
that is
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 going on in
country
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the country
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 there are
people
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 responsible for each process.
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, factories,
which
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apply
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in
city
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the city
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Almaty
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of Almaty
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,
causes
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cause
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pollution
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 and they have their own management and
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government
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the government
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 can not be in charge of
this
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.
Nevertheless
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, I believe that it is not possible for authorities to take control over every step of transportation causing
pollution
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.
On the other hand
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, there are
people
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 saying that it is on individuals and I
also
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 believe that it is on them, because everyone should have responsibility for themselves. If
this
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 happens, maybe
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pollution
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the pollution
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 level will decrease and
cause
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the cause
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 of it will disappear.
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, if every person had electrocars or used
bicycle
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a bicycle
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,
public
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or public
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 transport, it would reduce
pollution
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 and it would be even healthier for
people
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.
Besides
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, I believe that
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pollution
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the pollution
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 problem can be solved
this
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 way without any other problems. In conclusion,
people
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 who are blaming
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government
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the government
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 should stop thinking that they should be in charge of
this
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, take
responcabillity
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responsibility
on
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for
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 themselves and help to solve
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the polution
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polution
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pollution
 problem
by
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with
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 their own efforts.

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clear comprehensive ideas
Make sure to clearly present your ideas and support them with specific examples. For instance, when discussing the role of individuals, you could provide more concrete examples of how individuals can contribute to reducing pollution.
logical structure
Ensure that your main points are logical and sufficiently developed. Consider refining your argument about the government's control over pollution by providing additional context or examples.
introduction conclusion present
Proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and improve clarity. Pay attention to word choice, verb tense, and sentence structure.
logical structure
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps in understanding your argument.
complete response
The essay covers both sides of the argument, demonstrating an attempt to provide a balanced discussion.
introduction conclusion present
Your opinion is clearly stated, and you attempt to provide reasons for your viewpoint, which is essential for task achievement.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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