Research has shown that the transportation of products and people are the main source of pollution. Some people believe government should be in charge of this, while others believe it is the fault of individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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Research has presented that
the
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apply
people
and transfer products are the major polution
source, Correct your spelling
pollution
someone
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some
thinks
that Correct subject-verb agreement
think
government
should be Correct article usage
the government
in responce
for Correct word choice
responsible
this
, while
others say that it is the fault of workers. The government
can not control all processes, however
I think that Add a comma
however,
all
processes Correct word choice
if all
is
on workers Change the verb form
are
then
their
are to blame.
On the one hand, there are Correct pronoun usage
they
people
blaming government
, but Add an article
the government
government
can not have authority over all processes and work Add an article
the government
that is
going on in country
there are Correct article usage
the country
people
responsible for each process. For example
, factories, which
in Correct pronoun usage
apply
city
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the city
Almaty
, Change preposition
of Almaty
causes
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cause
pollution
and they have their own management and government
can not be in charge of Correct article usage
the government
this
. Nevertheless
, I believe that it is not possible for authorities to take control over every step of transportation causing pollution
.
On the other hand
, there are people
saying that it is on individuals and I also
believe that it is on them, because everyone should have responsibility for themselves. If this
happens, maybe pollution
level will decrease and Correct article usage
the pollution
cause
of it will disappear. Correct article usage
the cause
For example
, if every person had electrocars or used bicycle
, Correct article usage
a bicycle
public
transport, it would reduce Correct word choice
or public
pollution
and it would be even healthier for people
. Besides
, I believe that pollution
problem can be solved Correct article usage
the pollution
this
way without any other problems.
In conclusion, people
who are blaming government
should stop thinking that they should be in charge of Correct article usage
the government
this
, take responcabillity
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responsibility
on
themselves and help to solve Change preposition
for
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the polution
polution
problem Correct your spelling
pollution
by
their own efforts.Change preposition
with
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clear comprehensive ideas
Make sure to clearly present your ideas and support them with specific examples. For instance, when discussing the role of individuals, you could provide more concrete examples of how individuals can contribute to reducing pollution.
logical structure
Ensure that your main points are logical and sufficiently developed. Consider refining your argument about the government's control over pollution by providing additional context or examples.
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Proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and improve clarity. Pay attention to word choice, verb tense, and sentence structure.
logical structure
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps in understanding your argument.
complete response
The essay covers both sides of the argument, demonstrating an attempt to provide a balanced discussion.
introduction conclusion present
Your opinion is clearly stated, and you attempt to provide reasons for your viewpoint, which is essential for task achievement.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.