The charts below shows the average percentages in typical meals o three types of nutrients l, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below shows the average percentages in typical meals o three types of nutrients l, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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the presented pie charts compare three different kinds of nutrients ( sodium, saturated fat, added sugar) in four sections( typical meals). it is clearly seen that
proportion
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the proportion
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of "
dinner
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" is the highest value in sodium and saturated fat,
while
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"
snacks
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"
stands
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stand
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in the first place in added sugar. as can be seen, the
contribution
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of
breakfast
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and
snacks
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are
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is
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the same in sodium
with
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at
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14% ,
whereas
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the share of lunch is 29% ,
the
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and the
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remaining percentage in the first nutrients belongs to
dinner
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with 43%.
according to
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second
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the second
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figures, the
contribution
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of
breakfast
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, lunch and
snacks
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are
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is
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16%, 21% and 26% respectively. the
contribution
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of
dinner
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(37%) is over twice as high as
breakfast
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which
it
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apply
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has the lowest
contribution
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.
according to
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the third figure, the share of
snacks
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ranks first with 42% which is under three times as high as
breakfast
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with
16
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a 16
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%
contribution
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. lunch and
dinner
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is
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apply
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contributed 19% and 23%. respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, snacks, contribution, breakfast with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Saturated fat
  • Trans fat
  • Sodium
  • Carbohydrates
  • Cholesterol
  • Processed foods
  • Nutrient density
  • Dietary guidelines
  • Metabolism
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Hypertension
  • Recommended daily intake (RDI)
  • Nutritional label
  • Food pyramid
  • Balanced diet
  • Health awareness
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