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The line graph below shows average daily temperatures in four different cities throughout one year

The line graph below shows average daily temperatures in four different cities throughout one year
The provided illustration compares data about how
temperature
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the temperature
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 was changed in 4 cities throughout a period of 12
months
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.
Overall
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, a figure for Auckland was on the top of the illustration,
whereas
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, graphs for London and Edinburgh stood
last
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. Auckland
initially
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 stood nearly at 25
O°C
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 at the beginning of the period, which was followed by a stabilization for the first 3
months
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 until March.
Then
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, it decreased slightly by 3
O°C
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 each
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months
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 until August, approaching
it
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10
O°C
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. after
whih
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which
 it increased steadily for
remaining
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the remaining
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months
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. The same changes were seen in Christchurch;
however
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, it did not witness
the
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stabilization in the first 3
months
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 and its low was 15
O°C
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 in July. The reversed trend was true for London and Edinburgh. The graph for Edinburgh
initially
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 stood at 6 0°C, before witnessing a constant increase of 2
O°C
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 each month until June. After the increase, it saw a stagnation, which was followed by an insignificant decrease during the rest of the period. The same way of alternations were observed in London;
although
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 its peak was approximately 21
O°C
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 in July.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words months, o°c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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