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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the consumption of three types of fast food by juveniles in Mauritius between 1985 and 2015.
Overall
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, it can be seen an upward trend was observed in both
Hamburgers
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 and fried
chicken
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,
while
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 a downward trend was seen in
Pizza
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 throughout the period. In 1985, the figure for
Hamburgers
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,
Pizza
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, and fried
chicken
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 was 10, 60, and around 5 per time eaten yearly, respectively. The number of pizzas decreased gradually to 40,
whereas
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 that of fried
chicken
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 boosted significantly and intercepted the amount of
pizza
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 at 40 during the same period. Meanwhile, the figure for
hamburgers
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 depicted a steady growth to approximately 35 in 2000. There was a dramatic rise in the number of fried
chicken
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 to 60 in 2005.
This
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 was followed by a period of stability in that number until 2010, before rising to just under 65
at the end
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.
Although
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 the figure for
hamburgers
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 increased steadily to roughly 70 in 2015, that of
pizza
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 illustrated a significant decline to 10
at the end
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburgers, chicken, pizza with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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