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The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram below describes how the amount of money invested by US citizens into
cell
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phone
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 and residential
phone
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services
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 changed between 2001 and 2010.
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, the popularity of residential
phone
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services
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 continually decreases
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 to
cell
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phone
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services
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, where a steady rise can be observed. Turning
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 to the year 2001, the majority of households preferred to spend money on residential
services
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 in comparison to using
cell
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phones
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, where only a low number of purchases is being recorded.
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, over the
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years
, the number of money spent on purchasing residential
services
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 continues to decrease and
on the other hand
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, increase rapidly when observing
cell
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phone
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services
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. The two meet at
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 amount of invested funds somewhere between 2006 and 2007,
however
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 afterwards they continue to develop in the same course as seen before.
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,
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 of the given time period, the majority of US customers prefer to use
cell
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phones
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 as opposed to using residential
phones
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. In conclusion, the use of
cell
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phones
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 increased significantly when compared to residential
phones
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, where a slow decline in sales can be seen.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cell, phone, services, phones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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