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The graph below shows the population of foxes on four diffeent Californian islands between 1994 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the population of foxes on four diffeent Californian islands between 1994 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates data on the
population
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 of
foxes
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 in
four
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 different parts of Californian
islands
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 from 1994 until 2014. During the early years, the data showed that three out of
four
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islands
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 had a high fox
population
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 with
Santa
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 Catalina being the lowest of the three having around 1333
foxes
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, and
Santa
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 Rosa started with the highest at approximately 1780
foxes
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.
However
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, from 1994 until 2000, all
four
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 of the
islands
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 experienced a major fall in the figure of fox populations, and the year 2000 was the lowest point of some of the
islands
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, as they had roughly around 18 to 0
foxes
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.
After
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this
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 dramatic decrease,
Santa
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 Catalina’s fox
population
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 grew a year after the decrease and continued to increase until 2014 with 1666
foxes
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.
Santa
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 Cruz's recovery was slow, until 4 years later the number of
foxes
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 greatly expanded and slightly surpassed
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 Catalina.
On the other hand
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, San Miguel and
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 Rosa began increasing in 2006 and San Miguel ended at around 550.
Santa
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 Rosa ended lower than it had started with 800
foxes
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. In conclusion, the
population
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 of
foxes
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 on the
four
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 Californian
islands
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 encountered significant declines between 1994 and 2000, followed by degrees of recovery that varied.
Santa
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 Cruz saw the most substantial rebound,
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 San Miguel maintained the same
population
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 throughout the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, foxes, four, islands, santa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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