The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020
The illustrated line graph provides information about the
quantity
of people who participated Change the quantifier
number
for
various activities Change preposition
in
at
one public area in Melbourne throughout a 20-year period from 2000 to 2020.
Change preposition
in
Overall
, it is clearly seen that the figure of participants joined
Correct pronoun usage
who joined
film
club Correct article usage
the film
showed
Verb problem
apply
a
Correct article usage
apply
remain
steady, table tennis activity witnessed an upward trend and the community of Verb problem
apply
theater
experienced a downward pattern during Change the spelling
theatre
this
period of 20 years.
In detail, the biggest activity was film
club. Over the period, society joined film Correct article usage
the film
club
remained Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
stably
from 2000 to 2020 at just under 65 participants and just over 65 participants, respectively. Change the word
stable
This
pattern similar
Add a missing verb
is similar
like
people who join Martial arts. Change preposition
to
In addition
, the number of people at table tennis and musical performances were increase
to just over 50 and approximately 27 respectively in 2020.
Wrong verb form
increased
On the other hand
, the figure of non-professional dramatics rose in 2005 at around 27 then
decreased gradually between 2010 to 2020.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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