The solution to the overpopulation of this planet is education. Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this statement. Support your point with reasons or examples from your own experience.

Population growth has become a serious problem on earth which some people
belive
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it
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apply
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could be erased by spreading information through
education
to
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people. I totally disagree with
this
point
due to
few
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a few
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reasons which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs with some relevant
explanation
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explanations
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in brief.
To begin
with Healthcare systems, doctors can guide to women the side effects of having more babies by providing more information with solutions. Using protection
while
making physical
reaction
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reactions
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is essential because
this
is one solution which may help to overcome overpopulation.
Also
, professional Healthcare
department
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departments
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can
aware
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to
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of
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local people by
organizating
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organising
campus, in which they can show videos, pictures, and some real examples of
this
issue.
Because some
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Some
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individuals do not have
idea
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any idea
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what are the causes of more children, but by attending
these awareness campus
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this awareness campus
these awareness campuses
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they will think twice.
As a result
,
this
step will
put
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a positive effect on the economy of the country as
burden
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on local authorities may
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.
Furthermore
,
government
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the government
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play an integral role
due to
some factors.
Law makers
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Lawmakers
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can introduce child policy
according to
the
overall
birth rate of the nation which may help to mitigate
this
problem.
For example
,
few
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years ago,
China
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the Chinese
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government made a rule of one child policy which was followed by
citizens
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the citizens
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of China and they
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overpopulation. No doubt,
education
has become a part of
everyone
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everyone's
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life because teachers teach
to
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children everything
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at in
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in
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an
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appropriate age about family planning and sex
education
. In their
further
life, they will follow what they learn about the causes and benefits of overpopulation. In conclusion, there are other factors which can make a little participation to save
earth
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the earth
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than
education
because is only for making successful life of children not for educating about sex. So, government and Healthcare systems should come first to solve
this
burning issue by taking reasonable steps.
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Your essay has an organized structure with clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in maintaining focus on the topic.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples, such as the one-child policy in China, which strengthen your argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family Planning
  • Population Growth
  • Economic Empowerment
  • Societal Norms
  • Birth Rates
  • Government Policies
  • Healthcare Access
  • Multifaceted Issue
  • Cultural Norms
  • Long-term Changes
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