The solution to the overpopulation of this planet is education. Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this statement. Support your point with reasons or examples from your own experience.
Population growth has become a serious problem on earth which some people
belive
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believe
it
could be erased by spreading information through Correct pronoun usage
apply
education
to
people. I totally disagree with Change preposition
apply
this
point due to
few
reasons which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs with some relevant Correct article usage
a few
explanation
in brief.
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explanations
To begin
with Healthcare systems, doctors can guide to women the side effects of having more babies by providing more information with solutions. Using protection while
making physical reaction
is essential because Fix the agreement mistake
reactions
this
is one solution which may help to overcome overpopulation. Also
, professional Healthcare department
can Fix the agreement mistake
departments
aware
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be aware
to
local people by Change preposition
of
organizating
campus, in which they can show videos, pictures, and some real examples of Correct your spelling
organising
this
issue. Because some
individuals do not have Correct word choice
Some
idea
what are the causes of more children, but by attending Correct quantifier usage
any idea
these awareness campus
they will think twice. Change the determiner
this awareness campus
these awareness campuses
As a result
, this
step will put
a positive effect on the economy of the country as Verb problem
have
burden
on local authorities may Correct article usage
the burden
reduce
.
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be reduced
Furthermore
, government
play an integral role Correct article usage
the government
due to
some factors. Law makers
can introduce child policy Correct your spelling
Lawmakers
according to
the overall
birth rate of the nation which may help to mitigate this
problem. For example
, few
years ago, Change the article
a few
China
government made a rule of one child policy which was followed by Correct your spelling
the Chinese
citizens
of China and they Correct article usage
the citizens
overcome
overpopulation. No doubt, Wrong verb form
overcame
education
has become a part of everyone
life because teachers teach Change noun form
everyone's
to
children everything Change preposition
apply
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at in
in
appropriate age about family planning and sex Correct your spelling
an
education
. In their further
life, they will follow what they learn about the causes and benefits of overpopulation.
In conclusion, there are other factors which can make a little participation to save earth
than Add an article
the earth
education
because is only for making successful life of children not for educating about sex. So, government and Healthcare systems should come first to solve this
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coherence cohesion
Your essay has an organized structure with clear introduction and conclusion, which helps in maintaining focus on the topic.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples, such as the one-child policy in China, which strengthen your argument.