The solution to the overpopulation of this planet is education. Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with this statement. Support your point with reasons or examples from your own experience.

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Population growth has become a serious problem on earth which some people

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could be erased by spreading information through

education

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people. I totally disagree with

this

point

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reasons which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs with some relevant

explanation

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explanations

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in brief.

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with Healthcare systems, doctors can guide to women the side effects of having more babies by providing more information with solutions. Using protection

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is essential because

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is one solution which may help to overcome overpopulation.

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, professional Healthcare

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can

aware

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local people by

organizating

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organising

campus, in which they can show videos, pictures, and some real examples of

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issue.

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individuals do not have

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what are the causes of more children, but by attending

these awareness campus

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they will think twice.

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step will

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a positive effect on the economy of the country as

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on local authorities may

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play an integral role

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some factors.

Law makers

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can introduce child policy

according to

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overall

birth rate of the nation which may help to mitigate

this

problem.

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years ago,

China

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the Chinese

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government made a rule of one child policy which was followed by

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of China and they

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overpopulation. No doubt,

education

has become a part of

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life because teachers teach

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children everything

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at in

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appropriate age about family planning and sex

education

. In their

further

life, they will follow what they learn about the causes and benefits of overpopulation. In conclusion, there are other factors which can make a little participation to save

earth

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the earth

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than

education

because is only for making successful life of children not for educating about sex. So, government and Healthcare systems should come first to solve

this

burning issue by taking reasonable steps.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Topic Vocabulary:

Family Planning
Population Growth
Economic Empowerment
Societal Norms
Birth Rates
Government Policies
Healthcare Access
Multifaceted Issue
Cultural Norms
Long-term Changes

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