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The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided diagram
descibes
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describes
 the amount of pollution emitted in London during the given time period.
Overall
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, it compares the volume of two pollutants found in the air and records their development over the years.
Firstly
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, looking at the type of gas found in the atmosphere, we can differentiate between sulphur dioxide and smoke. Between 1550 and 1600 the
levels
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 of sulphur
as well as
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 smoke
have
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started out at the same amount,
however
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 throughout the years there have been significant changes and fluctuations in the numbers of their presence in the
athmosphere
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atmosphere
. Between 1600 and 1900, a steady rise in the
levels
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 of
concetration
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concentration
 regarding both pollutants can be observed. There was an
overall
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 upward trend and around the year 1890, both
reach
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reached
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 their highest recorded
levels
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. Afterwards, between 1890 and 1900, they can be seen to experience a sudden drop and continue to fluctuate, eventually reaching their minimum
levels
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 somewhere around the year 2000. In conclusion, the number of pollutants recorded in London in the given time period has had a steady rise for most of the time, before settling at the lowest recorded
levels
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words levels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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