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write about 4 reasons to learn a new language what is your opinion?

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In
this
 essay, we are gonna talk about "4 reasons to learn a new
language
".
Firstly
, I think
to learn
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 a new
language
 is very useful and it can help you all the time. I mean, in your travels,
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another countries
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another country
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, your workplace and so on. 1.You can use a new
language
 which you
learnd
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learned
learn
 in the town where you live.
For example
, you
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 to
the
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another country and you have to
talk
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 the
language
 of the area you visited. 2.For the fun. Today
people
also
 learn a new
language
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the
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fun.
May be
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, you don't need to
talk
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speak
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 another
language
 but you want to learn it. 3.For your education. Some
people
 want to study
in
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the
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abroad. They need it to take their needs, and get ahead in education. 4.For
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 to be intelligent. Sometimes,
people
 ( for the
some
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same
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 reasons, or not) want to be intelligent in every sense. They may learn new languages to improve themselves.
This
 is necessary to keep up with our times.
Also
 when
people
 learn clearly
the
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another
language
 they may
proud
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 of themselves. It makes them clever
according to
 their minds. In our age,
tecnology
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technology
 is developing and we have to go by the book.
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task achievement
Expand on your introduction to provide a clearer outline of the body points. The introduction should also state the purpose of the essay more explicitly.
coherence cohesion
Work on the grammatical accuracy and avoid repetition to make your sentences more coherent and flowing. This will also help in presenting your ideas more clearly.
coherence cohesion
Provide a more comprehensive conclusion that summarizes the reasons discussed and gives a final thought or recommendation related to the topic.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic and provides four reasons to learn a new language, aligning well with the task.
supported main points
The points made are relevant and provide a good basis for the reasons stated. Each point is easy to understand.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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