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Science is beneficial for society, so science students should get more support. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Scientists
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 and study every day to discover things to help society. It is logical that doctorate and post-doctorate
students
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 have more support to continue researching. I completely agree with
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 statement because a lot of science
students
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 do not have benefits
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 as health insurance and they
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 overtime even weekends for lower salaries. Many doctorate
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 have finished their careers and must start to
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 in laboratories with zero experience.
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, many mentors take advantage of
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 situation so, they do not give them benefits like health insurance and holidays. Even though, they do not have every necessary to research
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, is frustrating for them. In Argentina, there is a public institution that pays doctorate and
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post-doctorates
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 salaries, and
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 all. They do not have any other benefits because they are considered
students
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. Once future scientist starts to
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 many tutors explode making them
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 long hours even on weekends, just to benefit their projects.
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 cannot complain because they could lose their fellowships,
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, it is so hard to enter the system again if they are fired.
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 is unfair because student scientists
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 very hard to find solutions to society’s problems. During the pandemic of Covid,
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 and senior researchers worked together to discover the
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 a lot of deaths,
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,
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 did not receive enough recognition for their
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. In conclusion, science
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 are researching day by day to solve many of society’s problems,
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, it should be fair that they receive more recognition for their activities and more economic and psychological support from their mentors. Scientists are very important in our society.

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coherence cohesion
To strengthen the logical structure, consider making clearer connections between your main points. For instance, directly linking each supporting idea back to your thesis statement could help. You may also benefit from outlining your essay briefly before writing to ensure a smooth flow of ideas.
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Clarify and expand upon your examples where possible. Explaining how the specifics of the situation you are describing connect to your larger argument would make your examples more compelling and relevant.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion effectively present and wrap up your argument, contributing to a clear and focused overarching structure.
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Your essay provides a complete response to the prompt, addressing the need for more support for science students and providing reasons and examples.
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You have clearly articulated your ideas, making strong points about the hardships science students face and why they deserve more support.
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