A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money , either to sponsor a local children's sport team for 2 years or to pay for to open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express my thoughts and opinions. In our
area
, a large and prestigious company has indicated that it wants to provide money
for 2 years from its own account for a sports
fund
or an open-air concert
. They said that they will consider the opinions of people
in the area
for the allocation of this
money
. Among others, I am expressing my opinion. First of all, if I say the sports
fund
; if money
is allocated for sports
, not only young children and teenagers, but also
older people
in the region will play sports
. In addition
, they are freed from health problems and become much healthier. If young people
practice sports
well, they can reach the world championship.
It is not bad if they allocate money
for concerts
. Because there are few concerts
in our area
. This
is because the money
is not allocated only for concerts
. There are advantages to paying for a concert
. For example
, since there are few concerts
in our area
, many people
are more inclined to only TV or telephone. When outdoor concerts
are held, people
know that there are great things in real life. In the evening, after watching the concert
, everyone goes on family trips.
I think it will be better if the company allocates money
for the sports
fund
. Because they go to the concert
for 1 day or at most 5 days, and the rest of the day will not have time for everyone. But if money
is allocated to the sports
fund
, teenagers can always do something and achieve some result
.
Yours faithfully,
Qobiljonova KamolaFix the agreement mistake
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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow of your ideas. Make sure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next, which will help increase your coherence score.
task achievement
Make sure to fully address all points of the prompt in equal measure. Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team and the benefits of the concerts more comprehensively to boost your task achievement score.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific details or examples for each of your main points to add depth to your letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses clearly on a single main idea. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are well-done, which is important for maintaining formal letter-writing conventions.
task achievement
The writing tone is suitable for this type of formal letter, showing respect and a balanced perspective.
coherence cohesion
There are clear attempts to separate the letter into distinct sections, each with its own focus, which enhances overall coherence.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.
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