You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
Dear Umid
I am writing to provide
a
information that you Correct article usage
the
question
me Verb problem
asked
yesterday
. My first piece of advice isChange preposition
for yesterday
, do
not Verb problem
apply
apply
for a college. Because of high college Fix the infinitive
to apply
contracts
you may lose Add a comma
contracts,
lot
of money and even if you find Change the article
a lot
a
money, nowadays people do not Remove the article
apply
pays
attention to the diploma you have. But Change the verb form
pay
on the other
hand
you can get more knowledge and you may find peace by reading books. You may be confused Add a comma
hand,
why
getting a Change preposition
as to why
job
is better than studying. Having a job
is better because you can buy cars and other things you need and good
thing is you can have your own money. Add an article
the good
In addition
to this
you can not make millions of dollars by a college diploma. So you may wonder, what kind of work suits you best. Add a comma
this,
Well
I think working in construction or online trading is the best Add the punctuation
Well,
jobs
you can find these days. You may Fix the agreement mistake
job
think
why he Verb problem
wonder
advice
me a construction Replace the word
advised
job
. Reason
I choose Add an article
The reason
this
job
is because of your strength. I suggest that you appreciate my advices
and I look forward to Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
get
your answer.
Yours sincerely
Safarov AbrorjonChange the verb form
getting
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coherence cohesion
Work on sentence structure and clarity. Some sentences are a bit confusing, which can affect the overall readability.
coherence cohesion
Paragraphs should focus on a single idea each for better organization. This will improve readability and coherence.
task achievement
Add specific examples or evidence to strengthen your arguments and make your advice more compelling.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread your letter for grammar and spelling errors to improve the overall quality of writing.
task achievement
The letter addresses the points asked in the task, providing reasons, explanations, and suggestions.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and supportive, which suits the context of writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, making the letter feel complete and respectful.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.