The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
The diagram shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking
water
in an Australian town.
The picture above illustrates the process of getting drinking water
from rainwater in an Australian town, due to
water
source issues. It starts with collecting rain into drains and ends up with tidewater water
being flown from the faucet.
Collected liquid from different houses, together goes into a huge rain filter, which is placed under the ground. Already filtered clean rain then
transported to storage, which accommodates more litres than the filter one, and after getting all the product, Add a missing verb
is then
water
goes to the next stage of the process.
Thereafter
, from the storage, water
moves in pipes to the liquid treatment block. In this
step, it is getting treatment, and saturated with chemicals. Former dirty water
gets some nutrients and minerals, to become tasteful and harmless. Finally
, drinking water
is ready to use, and it only needs to be delivered to the houses by pipes. That is
how Australians get clean water
despite a lack of water
resources.Submitted by moon2014angel on
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