The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010
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The provided bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australians of different ages who had been involved in the exercise in 2010. In general, it is clearly seen that
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the biggest percentage of women was between age 45 and 54,
whereas
the proportion of men was from 15 to 24.
Firstly
, the highest of males who do regular physical activities were young adults from 15 years old to 24 years old at 52.8 per
cent
followed by elders (65 and over) at 46.7 per
cent
.
Secondly
, for females, the proportion of Australian women aged between 45 and 54 was higher at 53.3 % and in the second place was adult females at 53 per
cent
.
On the other hand
, the lower percentage of Australian females did exercised 47,1 per
cent
were elderly women and 39.5 per
cent
for men approximately 39.5 % with aged from 35 to 44.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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