The chart below shows what anthroplogy graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in the work after five years.

The chart below shows what anthroplogy graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in the work after five years.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of 6 different job destinations of those who
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graduated from one university after taking
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anthropology
course. The table displays
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data
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earning
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career after 5 years
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in 3 areas of employment.
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given are percentages.
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have a career
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anthropology
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full-time marked a higher figure among others
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of them were unemployed and not known profession.
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to higher wages. Looking at the bar, more than
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half of them work
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full-time.
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full-time but still continuing their postgraduate studies accounted for 8%,
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number as
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category. The people out of work fell a second close with 12%.
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,
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salary of
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, the majority of freelance consultants and the
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sector meaning 80% of them earned more than 75,000 dollars. As for the private companies, 55%
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words anthropology with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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