In some countries, the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation and discourages private vehicle ownership. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation

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These days, the technology of transportation has been developing really fast and people can
used
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publict
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public
transportations which have a range of facilities
also
, some
governmnets
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governments
believe it is important that people use
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a public
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form
instead
of privet cars and avoid inhabitants
to have
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own vehicles.
while
that is
public transportations have a lot of benefits, I still that it cannot overshadow the drawbacks. On the one hand, when
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public
transportations
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transportation
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are
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the main way of transport, they have several merits.
Firstly
, unless people use
own
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their own
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cars for travelling, the amount of air pollution, which
this
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harmful gases have a lot of damage
for
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environment
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, will be
resducing
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reduced
, so the both population and
sorrounding
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surrounding
surroundings
are
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.
Secondly
, communities who live
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areas have access to other districts owing to the fact that the best things are public
taransport
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transport
and authorities improve them.
On the other hand
, the number of demerits of just public transport is varied. On the one side, when you are sick and need emergency go to the
hispital
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hospital
and you cannot catch public
trasportations
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transportation
transportations
;
as a result
,
in
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this
time
the best vehicle that can help us is
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the owner
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owner
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owner's
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cars
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car
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. On the other side, public transportation
have
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time
that is
when they arrive
in
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at
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places;
therfore
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therefore
, when you are not on
time
, you lose it;
hence
,
in
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this
time
we should use
own
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our own
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car
for
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to
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go to
the
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meeting
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, work, or other things on
time
.
For instance
, when I used to study in Tehran, I used
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the train
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for
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to
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go anywhere inasmuch as I did not have a car;
furthermore
, one
time
I
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the
last
subway, and I could not go to my
dormetory
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dormitory
at 10:30. In sum
up
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apply
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,
that is
True the best
wasy
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way
ways
that we have a trip is public transportation which has a lot of
adantages
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advantages
for
world
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;
neverthelss
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nevertheless
, in some
position
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positions
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we need privet form;
thus
, in my opinion, the bad points are
eplicits
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explicit
elicits
the good points.
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task achievement
Ensure you fully develop your main ideas with detailed explanations and relevant examples. For instance, when discussing the drawbacks, you could elaborate more on personal convenience and economic implications.
task achievement
Focus on reducing grammatical and spelling errors to achieve clearer communication. For example, 'also, some governments believe it is important...' should be 'Also, some governments believe it is important...','public trasportations' should be 'public transportations', 'I lose the last subway' should be 'I lost the last subway'.
coherence/cohesion
Improve coherence by logically structuring your essay with clear topic sentences that introduce each main point. This can be achieved by clearly marking transitions between the advantages and disadvantages in the paragraphs.
coherence/cohesion
Start with a general introduction to the topic, clearly state your position, and make sure to summarize your main points in the conclusion to enhance clarity.
task achievement
The essay shows a good understanding of the topic and attempts to address both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence/cohesion
There is a logical sequence to the points made, generally maintaining a clear structure throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • commute
  • carbon emissions
  • economical
  • maintenance
  • overcrowding
  • socio-economic group
  • infrastructure
  • reliability
  • flexibility
  • public policy
  • sustainability
  • personal mobility
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