Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Nowadays, social science is more and more developed, the world is becoming more modern and rich.

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, today we humans have many

choices

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, for me I partly agree with it because

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rich

people

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will have more

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while

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poor

people

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only have one choice. On the one hand,

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the rich,

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will have many

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, when going to the hospital,

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of choosing ordinary services, they will have many

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such

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as not having to wait in line for a long time to get a number to see a doctor, they will go to a higher floor, there will be good service, everything will be handled quickly.

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, when they travel, they can choose a good hotel, a hotel with super good facilities and services so that they can enjoy a wonderful trip. They can

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what they want to accumulate for themselves their experiences, knowledge, and happiness.

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those who do not have the same conditions as the rich,

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will not have many

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but

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only have one choice. They are

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who do not have many

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, so when choosing something, they will look and choose very carefully, and the first thing they prioritize when choosing is the item or service with a cheap price.

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, the rich choose places with high prices, good services, or accommodation,

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the poor choose places with low prices and tourist destinations that have good prices for them. In conclusion, I want to say that

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today have many

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only for the rich, but

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those who do not have the conditions,

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will have very few

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, that does not mean that their lives become unhappy, or do not have the

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like the rich. Anyway, they will

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the way the poor have. They will still be happy with their family and their life, and it is because of that poverty that they always find ways to enjoy and

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the life they have so as not to fall behind society.

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task achievement

The essay could be improved by developing arguments further and providing a more balanced view. Try to explore the topic from multiple perspectives and provide a more nuanced discussion with more detailed examples.

coherence cohesion

The essay includes an introduction and conclusion, which is important for structuring the essay.

task achievement

The main points are sufficiently supported with relevant examples, and there are specific scenarios to illustrate the arguments.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

348 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

overwhelmed
decision fatigue
paralysis by analysis
consumerism
globalization
personal autonomy
market saturation
option overload
decision-making process
psychological well-being
buyer's remorse
customization
trade-offs
minimalism
information superhighway

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