You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided bar graph illustrates the proportion of females moving abroad for their tertiary education in 1980 and 2015. The
unit
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are measured in percentage. The
overall
impression of the chart is that, almost in all the countries, there was a significant growth in female
students
.
While
Australia
was the only country where numbers remained the same. Even after having the same
number
Australia
had the highest
number
of female
students
in both the years.
To begin
with, around 35% of women chose
UK
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the UK
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and the USA as their
destination
to continue their higher education in 1980.
However
,
these
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number
rose to 55% approximately in 2015. On
other
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hand,
Soth
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South
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Korea had never been a very popular
destination
for girls, lowest
number
for
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female
students
enrolled
themselves
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in S. Korean universities in both
the
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apply
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years. (15% and 30% respectively.)
Furthermore
,
Australia
had
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been a very popular study
destination
among females. Almost 60% of female
students
were going to
Australia
to study in both
the
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years. And France seems to be
second
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the second
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popular
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most popular
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destination
for women, as 50% of women were enrolled in French universities in 1980 and roughly 55% in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, australia, number, destination with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • higher education
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • significant
  • comparison
  • identify
  • highest
  • lowest
  • contextual
  • global
  • relevant
  • constant
  • substantial
  • fluctuation
  • proportional
  • data
  • evaluate
  • analyze
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