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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The Line Chart displays the
quantity
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number
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 of guests visiting The Louvre, The London Science
Museum
, The Vatican
Museums
 and, the Shenzhen
Museum
since
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from
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 1980 to 2015.
Overall
, the Louvre and Vatican
Museums
 have had the highest
number
 of
visitor
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visitors
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while
London
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the London
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 Science
Museum
 and Shenzhen
Museum
 had the lowest. The Louvre
Museum
 started
near
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nearly
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 8
million
of
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visits
 in 1980, and during the following years the
number
 floating
until
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reached just below 10
million
of
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tourists. The Vatican
Museums
 had around 5
million
 in 1980, from there the
number
 of
visits
 went up indefinitely and finished
nearly
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at nearly
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 9
million
 in 2015. London Science
Museum
 between 1980 and 1985 had 4
million
of
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visits
however
 from 1990 the
visits
 dramatically dropped being the
Museum
 with
less
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fewer
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 visitors in 2015
with
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to
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 just over 2
million
.
About
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Shenzhen
Museums
 between 1980 and
2000
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2000,
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 the
number
 of
visits
 remained
in
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at
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 just over 3
million
of
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visitors and
then
 the
amount
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number
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 of people going to the
museum
 went up reaching
closely
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close
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 to 4
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, museums, number, million, visits with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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