The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and  reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The Line Chart displays the
quantity
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number
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of guests visiting The Louvre, The London Science
Museum
, The Vatican
Museums
and, the Shenzhen
Museum
since
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from
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1980 to 2015.
Overall
, the Louvre and Vatican
Museums
have had the highest
number
of
visitor
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visitors
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while
London
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the London
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Science
Museum
and Shenzhen
Museum
had the lowest. The Louvre
Museum
started
near
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nearly
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8
million
of
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visits
in 1980, and during the following years the
number
floating
until
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reached just below 10
million
of
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tourists. The Vatican
Museums
had around 5
million
in 1980, from there the
number
of
visits
went up indefinitely and finished
nearly
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at nearly
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9
million
in 2015. London Science
Museum
between 1980 and 1985 had 4
million
of
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visits
however
from 1990 the
visits
dramatically dropped being the
Museum
with
less
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fewer
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visitors in 2015
with
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to
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just over 2
million
.
About
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Shenzhen
Museums
between 1980 and
2000
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2000,
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the
number
of
visits
remained
in
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at
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just over 3
million
of
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visitors and
then
the
amount
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number
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of people going to the
museum
went up reaching
closely
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close
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to 4
million
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, museums, number, million, visits with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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