You have a suggestion for a park nearby where you live. Write a letter to your city’s council. In your letter include: •what your suggestion is •why you think this suggestion will improve the park •when you would like to see this suggestion in action
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to give a suggestion for a park
located near my house in the North York area.
My name is Sophia Brown. I want to tell you that as this
is the only park
in the area, most members visit there for a walk or other activities. Although
it may have all the amenities that a regular park
requires, there is no game-related equipment where children can play such
as; swings and sea saws. I suggest you install these plays in the park
so parents can spend quality time with their children.
The suggestion, I give will attract more people to the park
and gain popularity in other societies. Apart from that, as good citizens, people would also
help the city to keep the location neat and tidy so they can visit there and continue their activities throughout this
summer.
I want you to work on this
idea at your early convenience so everyone can enjoy this
season with their loved ones at the park
and children can get out of their homes to do physical activities rather than just sitting on electronic devices.
I would appreciate it if you could install the machines before this
summer.
Waiting for your positive reply towards it.
Yours Faithfully,
Sophia Brown.Submitted by kaverigoti2209 on
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grammar
Be mindful of minor grammatical errors, such as the use of 'plays' instead of 'play equipment'.
structure
Consider structuring your paragraphs more distinctly, focusing on one idea per paragraph for better clarity.
task achievement
You've addressed all the points required by the task effectively, making it a complete response.
writing tone
Your writing tone is appropriate and suits the formal nature of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
You've provided a logical structure with clear points on suggestion, benefits, and timeline.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.