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In your article, say whether or not people should set personal goals, giving reasons for your views.

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I recently heard a podcast on the subject of setting personal
goals
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. I personally think that having
goals
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 and
archiving
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 them is a good thing. But you shouldn’t let that just be your whole life. Sometimes you should spend time with your friends and family. In the podcast I heard that it’s easy to have
goals
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 but harder to achieve them” But I disagree with
this
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 kind of Because of
todays
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today's
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 technology
its
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it's
it is
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 way easier there
is
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 people to help you
achive
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achieve
 your
goals
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. But of
course
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course,
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 you have to actually work hard and
belive
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believe
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 in
your self
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yourself
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. There is a lot of pressure
specially
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 for the young ones when trying to reach your
goals
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. But in the
end
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 it will all be worth it.
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task achievement
To improve your task response, make sure you provide a more complete and well-rounded response to the prompt. Include both supporting and opposing viewpoints to show a balanced argument.
task achievement
Ensure that your main points are clearly presented and adequately supported with specific examples and explanations. This makes your argument stronger and more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your essay. Having clear paragraphs with topic sentences can help the reader follow your argument smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Include both an introduction and a conclusion to structure your essay well. The introduction should set up the topic and state your thesis, while the conclusion should summarize your main points and restate your position on the issue.
task achievement
Your essay shows a clear personal perspective, which makes it engaging and relatable.
coherence cohesion
You provide several points about the importance of setting goals and balancing it with other aspects of life, which makes your argument multifaceted.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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