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The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about the distribution of three different valuable metals'
price
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 histories namely Gold,
Platinum
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 and Palladium over a
period
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 of 9 years between 2013 and 2021. The units are measured in $ per
oz
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the figures for all metals showed an upward trend with the exception of
Platinum
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 over the
period
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. Interestingly, the highest
price
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at the end
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 of the
period
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 was Palladium. At the beginning of the
period
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, the
price
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 of
Platinum
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 and Gold started at around $1500/
oz
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 and both figures had a slight decrease to $1000/
oz
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 and $1200/
oz
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, respectively in 2015. From
this
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 point onwards, Gold's
price
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 increased regularly to around $1800 in 2020 and remained stable in the following year.
However
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,
Platinum
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's
price
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 constituted a considerable fall at just under $1000/
oz
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 in 2020, before went up to well above $1000/
oz
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 in 2021.
On the other hand
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, Palladium's
price
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 stood at roughly $700/
oz
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 in 2013 and it oscillated to exactly $1000/
oz
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 in 2018.
Thereafter
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, it soared up to around $2500/
oz
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at the end
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 of the
period
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, platinum, period, oz with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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