The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the history of three different
metals
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metal prices
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price
between 2013 to 2021. The units given are
dollars
per ounce.
Overall
, all metals
price
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prices
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rose drastically over the recorded years, with the notable exception where platinum dropped steadily and stood at the lowest than others. Looking at the palladium and gold history, in 2013, palladium started at the lower point among others two, 750
dollars
per
oz
while
gold fell a second close with 1400
dollars
per
oz
.
However
,
since
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2014 until 2018, palladium
price
has
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a flactuation
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flactuation
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fluctuation
trend before
reach
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a peak point at 2300
dollars
per
oz
in 2021 which stood
a
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higher out of all three metals.
Similarly
,
gold
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price
had a
pleatue
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pleasure
pleated
trend and still fell a second close,
accounted
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at 1750
dollars
per
oz
. Regarding
to
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platinum, in 2013, stood at the higher compared to others before decreased to 800
dollars
per
oz
in 2020.
However
, a
slightly
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rise in the year 2021 but still stood at the least.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, dollars, oz with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 4 times.
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