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The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates data on
daily
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the daily
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 consumption cost of
water
 per person in five different countries (Tanzania, Uganda, Pakistan,
UK
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the UK
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 and
USA
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the USA
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). The units are measured in
USD
 and
percentage
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the percentage
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 of average daily wage. The
overall
 impression of the table is that Tanzania is paying 8 times higher price for the same quantity of
water
 than
USA
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the USA
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.
Also
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this
 inflated price
,
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apply
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 costs Tanzanian citizens a major chunk of their daily salary. As per the visual representation, it costs
USD
 6.4
to
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for
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 a person living in Tanzania to afford their basic need (
water
) each day, for which they need to
forefeit
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forfeit
 5.7% of their daily earnings. Followed by, Uganda which is paying
second
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the second
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highgest
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highest
 price of
USD
 4.1 to get the same
amentites
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amenities
.
On the contrary
,
USA
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US
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 citizens only need to pay 85 cents out of their pocket which means they are not even spending 0.1% of their daily wage to afford daily
water
requirement
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requirements
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.
Additionally
, countries like
Pakistand
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Pakistan
 and
UK
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the UK
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 are spending roughly
same
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the same
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 amount of money i.e.
USD
 1.76 and 1.3 respectively to
fullfill
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fulfil
 the need
of
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for
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water
 per day. But
this
 amount
costitute
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consists
 of nearly 1% of
daily
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the daily
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earning
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earnings
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 of a
pakistani
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Pakistani
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while
 it is just 0.013% for a
britisher
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British
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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