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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts in 2012 with the predictions for 2030

The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts in 2012 with the predictions for 2030
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The pie charts show six categories of
energy
capacity
 in gigawatts in 2012 and predictions for 2030.
Overall
, we can see that the proportion of
energy
 produced by fossil fuels will decrease,
while
energy
capacity
 by renewables
such
 as solar and wind will increase. A more detailed view
on
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 the pie charts reveals that, in 2012 64% of
energy
capacity
 was produced by fossil fuels but in 2030
this
 percentage will meet a significant fall of 20%
,
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 and
reaches
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 44% in 2030.
While
 the wind resource role in producing
energy
 in 2030 (12%) will be more than twice the amount it was in 2012 (5%) and the Solar
energy
capacity
 will construct nearly
one fourth
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 of the total
energy
capacity
 (18%) which is a noticeable increase from 2% in 2012. The other
energy
 resources almost remain the same during the mentioned period. Flexible
capacity
 will meet 1% reduction, from 2% to 1%,
while
 nuclear
energy
 will be increased from 5% of the whole to 6%. Other
renewables
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 role in producing
enery
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energy
 will decrease from 22% percent to 19%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, capacity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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