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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

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The idea of whether to ask the high graduated person to stay in the country after their education or to be free
for working
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 abroad is controversial today. Both
prospective
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perspectives
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 require careful examination, which we will discuss here.
Firstly
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, the opponents of working abroad point
that
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 the governments provide
the
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suitable circumstances for students to benefit them in
job
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the job
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 market in future.
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, they improve facilities
such
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 as
laboratory
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laboratories
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 and
library
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libraries
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 so that pupils will be
expert
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experts
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, and evolve
of
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in
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economy
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the economy
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.
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,
people
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 expect
that
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professionals
serve
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 their country because some parts of
taxes
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the taxes
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 which they pay, are used for
development
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the development
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 of universities
where
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which
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 are places for learning and studying. Lasting,
due to
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 the lack of sophisticated forces
such
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 as doctors and engineers, the medical care and industrial
centers
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centres
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 will be faced
to
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with
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 various problems later.
On the other hand
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, supporters of that idea say that the graduates
spent
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 their time and energy
for
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on
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 training to enhance
the
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their
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 social status.
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, if they find the current qua
inappropriately
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, they have
right
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 to choose other
countries
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 to be employed.
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,
a
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plenty of better opportunities will be supplied in foreign
environment
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environments
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 which persuade
people
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 to work there.
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, some criteria
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 job security and high value of money in Arabian
countries
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 encourage
people
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 from other
countries
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 to migrate there
for finding
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to find
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 a job. As a
last
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 point,
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however
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however,
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 the skilled individuals are absent in their native
countries
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 physically, they can be influential for other
people
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 by sharing their work experiences in online workshops or social media platforms. In conclusion, I feel that the stronger argument is in
favor
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favour
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 of
people
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 being free to
working
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work
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 abroad or not, with all disadvantages it may have. In fact, if learners decide to go to a foreign country after education, they are able to be
honor
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honoured
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 for their
countries
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 either.

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task achievement
To enhance clarity in your essay, ensure all ideas are fully developed and supported with specific examples. This will strengthen your arguments and make them more convincing. Also, pay attention to the grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to avoid minor errors.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a clear structure, but occasionally ideas could flow more smoothly. Using transitional phrases can help improve the flow between points. Additionally, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to enhance coherence.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly outlines the topic and the purpose of the essay, providing context for the reader.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and presents the writer's opinion, which helps to wrap up the essay nicely.
supported main points
Each point in the essay is supported with reasons and examples, showing a good effort to substantiate arguments.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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