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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.
#value #country’s #exports #categories
The
given
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bar chart
illustrated
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illustrates
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 information about  exporting
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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different
products
,
such
 as earnings 
between
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over
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 the time period
one
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of one
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year
.     At one glance,
the
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Pedroleum
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Petroleum
products
 and Engineered goods were the most exported in both
year
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years
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, except Gems and
Jewellary
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Jewellery
, Agricultural
products
 and Textiles, as these figures showed
a
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the
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 lowest percentage.    To clearly
seen
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see
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 that, In
the
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2015,
Pedroleum
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petroleum
products
 accounted for exactly 60$, and after one
year
,
It was
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it
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 slightly
increase
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increased
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just
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by just
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 about 63$.The fraction of Engineered goods started
with
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at
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 nearly 57$
while
, In
the
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2016
year
, It saw a rise
approximately
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of approximately
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 62$.      
To
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In
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contrary
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the contrary
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, The figure
of
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for
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 Gems and
Jewellary
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jewellery
 was slightly higher rather than
other kind
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another kind
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 of
products
, which were roughly 43$ at the
begin
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beginning
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 of
period
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the period
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, but In the
year
 2016,it was a little
decrease
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decreased
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at
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to
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 40$.Agricultural
products
were remaining
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remained
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 the same  in the both of
year
Fix the agreement mistake
years
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. The Textile
products
 underwent a 25$ and
finally
,It increased at 32$
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words products, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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