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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter say where you think you left the papers explain why they are so important tell the manager what you want him/her to do

#hotel #home #papers #manager
Dear Mr. Mike I am writing
this
 letter regarding the important documents that I
forgot
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left
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 in your hotel during my recent visit on August 9. It was a black leather handbag with a long chain strip, it
has
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had
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 my name written on it with golden thread. I vividly remember that I carried it before leaving my room and might left
in
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it in
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 the waiting area
while
 waiting for
taxi
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a taxi
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.
This
 purse is extremely necessary to me as it has all the important documents inside including a joining letter
of
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for
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 my new job, my IDs, and some cash,
near
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nearly
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 about 500. I can not join
new
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a new
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 job without these papers. I just want you to inform your staff about
this
 bag and ask them to check the waiting area.
Moreover
, I would really appreciate
if
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it if
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 you
can
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could
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 send my joining letter and my IDs through
mail
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the mail
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. I will be very
thankful
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grateful
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 to you.
Your
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Yours
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 sincerely, Navdeep
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coherence cohesion
The letter is quite well-organized, but remember to proofread for small errors. For example, 'might left' should be 'might have left.'
task achievement
Try to use a consistent tone. Switching from 'dear' to informal language can be jarring. Maintain a slightly more formal writing tone throughout.
coherence cohesion
The letter does an excellent job in clearly stating the purpose and organizing details in a logical manner.
greeting and closing
The closing is respectful and appropriately conveys gratitude.
task achievement
The importance of the documents is clearly explained, which adds to the urgency of the request.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear Sir/Madam,
  • I am writing to inform you that I believe I left some important papers at your hotel.
  • To the best of my recollection, I left the papers in the conference room.
  • These papers are of utmost importance as they contain confidential business information.
  • I kindly request that you or your staff check the conference room and securely send the papers to my address.
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