Historical objects and artefacts should be brought back to their country of origin. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The opinion is divided as
whether
historical objects and Change preposition
to whether
artfacts
should returned to their own Correct your spelling
artefacts
country
,while
it is sometimes argued that it can not provide any benefits.my view is that I am largely
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largely agree
agree
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agree on
agree to
agree with
this
opinion.
On one
hand,people who disagree Correct article usage
the one
this
view may consider Change preposition
with this
about
the Change preposition
apply
safty
of cultural Correct your spelling
safety
relic
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relics
transport
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transporting
antique
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Firstly
,during a long time transportation
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of transportation
the
historical objects may be damaged during Correct article usage
apply
this
period .For example
, along the way,these cultrue
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culture
cultural
relics
may be damaged by some collision and cursing.Secondly
,If the government wants to return these artifacts
to the Change the spelling
artefacts
country
which
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to which
is
they belong may cost a lot of money to transport and preserve the Unnecessary verb
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artifacts
but it might make more sense if the government spent the money on some infrastructures.
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artefacts
On the other hand
,returning them to their home country
can provide higher conservation quantity.Besides
,it also
can enhance national
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the national
confidence
of dwellers. the main reason lies in the fact that since there must be many similar cultural relics
in the original country
, the protection methods for these cultural relics
may be more mature, so returning them to the original country
can bring better protection for these cultural relics
.finally
,it also
can make local
residence more Add an article
the local
a local
confidence
, When the local residents see these beautiful cultural relics
, they will feel proud and proud and have higher confidence
in their own country
. So when the government makes any important decisions, they will cooperate more .
In conclusion , although
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they
it
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they
also
provide more benefits ,like bring
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bringing
thoes
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them
enhance
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enhancing
confidence
of local people.Add an article
the confidence
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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- namely
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