Historical objects and artefacts should be brought back to their country of origin. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The opinion is divided as
whether
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historical objects and
artfacts
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artefacts
should returned to their own
country
,
while
it is sometimes argued that it can not provide any benefits.my view is that I
am largely
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agree
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this
opinion. On
one
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hand,people who disagree
this
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with this
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view may consider
about
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apply
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the
safty
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safety
of cultural
relic
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relics
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and the cost of
transport
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transporting
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these
antique
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antiques
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.
Firstly
,during a long time
transportation
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of transportation
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,
the
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apply
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historical objects may be damaged during
this
period .
For example
, along the way,these
cultrue
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culture
cultural
relics
may be damaged by some collision and cursing.
Secondly
,If the government wants to return these
artifacts
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artefacts
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to the
country
which
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is
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they belong may cost a lot of money to transport and preserve the
artifacts
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artefacts
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but it might make more sense if the government spent the money on some infrastructures.
On the other hand
,returning them to their home
country
can provide higher conservation quantity.
Besides
,it
also
can enhance
national
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confidence
of dwellers. the main reason lies in the fact that since there must be many similar cultural
relics
in the original
country
, the protection methods for these cultural
relics
may be more mature, so returning them to the original
country
can bring better protection for these cultural
relics
.
finally
,it
also
can make
local
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the local
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residence more
confidence
, When the local residents see these beautiful cultural
relics
, they will feel proud and proud and have higher
confidence
in their own
country
. So when the government makes any important decisions, they will cooperate more . In conclusion ,
although
do not return
thoes
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they
can reduce loss,return
it
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also
provide more benefits ,like
bring
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bringing
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thoes
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them
better protection,or
enhance
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enhancing
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confidence
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the confidence
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of local people.
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