In some countries, it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow a vegetarian diet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
The consumption of
vegetables
and fruits are
gradually increased in some parts of the Verb problem
has
worlds
. Fix the agreement mistake
world
That is
, individuals are looking for more
healthy Add an article
a more
diet
. I believe that,
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apply
this
way(trend) is more beneficial for humanity and wildlife which (that) outweigh
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outweighs
the
its drawback.
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apply
Firstly
, the digestion system in our humans'
bodies suffers the lower pressure in Change noun form
humans
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
diet
in comparison to normal
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a normal
the normal
diet
which includes meat. In fact, vegetables
are absorbed quickly though the meat remains in stomach
and intestines for a long time, and its metabolism needs more carbohydrates Correct article usage
the stomach
as well
as
. Correct word choice
apply
Thus
, human
being body should be more active to be able to handle Correct article usage
the human
this
process. Furthermore
, vegetation leads to maintain
the rights of Wrong verb form
maintaining
animals
rather than the past. For example
, vegetarians eager
to Add a missing verb
are eager
safe
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save
animals
not
to use their products and even their furs Correct word choice
and not
for earning
money.
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to earn
It is clear that
everybody needs proteins
from animals
and vegetables
which
none of Correct pronoun usage
apply
them
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which
are produce
automatically in Change the verb form
are produced
are producing
human
body. Add an article
the human
For instance
, proteins
are part of main
structures of cells and Correct article usage
the main
shortage
of them interrupts basic functions. A person can consume fruit and Correct article usage
a shortage
vegetables
provided that he/ she be
able to use some extra protein supplements which consist of animal Correct subject-verb agreement
is
proteins
.
In conclusion, although
following vegetarian
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a vegetarian
diet
may create basic problems such
as, deistical and lack of animal proteins
for body
, their advantages likely bring Add an article
the body
healthy
life for a vegetarian person and Correct article usage
a healthy
also
animals
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the given task by examining both the advantages and disadvantages of following a vegetarian diet. However, try to provide more concrete examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your logical flow from one idea to the next is natural and smooth. Consider using cohesive devices such as 'Moreover,' 'In addition,' or 'On the other hand' for better coherence.
coherence cohesion
You have included both an introduction and a conclusion, which gives your essay a complete structure.
task achievement
The essay mostly provides clear ideas and arguments for the topic, highlighting both the benefits and the potential drawbacks of a vegetarian diet.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...