More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are some possible solutions?
People
in developing countries are increasingly buying cars
for the first time. The most common problem is, without being aware of road
safety, people
buy their first cars
, and the solution would be not permitting people
to buy cars
, without learning driving
properly.
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to drive
people
are buying cars
without learning driving skill
fully, and Fix the agreement mistake
skills
therefore
they cannot maintain traffic
rules properly. This
leads to fatal road
accidents, injury and even life loss of the driver, his fellow passengers, and the pedestrians. Moreover
, if every individual start
buying Correct subject-verb agreement
starts
car
of his own, each car would be for each person, and there Add an article
the car
a car
will
be a lot of Wrong verb form
would
traffic
jam
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jams
in
the Change preposition
on
road
. For example
, in Mumbai, India, everyone has their own vehicle and that causes a huge traffic
jam on the roads.
One of the possible solution
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solutions
of
these problems would be not granting Change preposition
to
driver's
license without proper testing. If a driver has Correct article usage
a driver's
full
, valid license, there is Add an article
a full
a
less possibility of Correct article usage
apply
accident
. Add an article
an accident
In addition
, the government and different agencies should come forward, and start awareness
campaign, which would promote using public Add an article
an awareness
transports
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transport
instead
of personal cars
. Public transports
can carry at least 10 to 20 passengers at a time, and that will mitigate the number of vehicles on the Fix the agreement mistake
transport
road
. For instance
, in Japan, numerous awareness campaigns about using public transport,
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apply
has
significantly reduced the Correct subject-verb agreement
have
vehicles
on the Correct quantifier usage
number of vehicles
road
and traffic
jam
.
Fix the agreement mistake
jams
To conclude
, not knowing driving
fully Wrong verb form
how to drive
however
, buying Add the comma(s)
, however
first
car is the cause of Change the article
the first
road
accidents and death. Several awareness campaigns will help to reduce the number of cars
in
the Change preposition
on
road
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