More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are some possible solutions?

People
in developing countries are increasingly buying
cars
for the first time. The most common problem is, without being aware of
road
safety,
people
buy their first
cars
, and the solution would be not permitting
people
to buy
cars
, without learning
driving
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properly. To start with,
people
are buying
cars
without learning driving
skill
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fully, and
therefore
they cannot maintain
traffic
rules properly.
This
leads to fatal
road
accidents, injury and even life loss of the driver, his fellow passengers, and the pedestrians.
Moreover
, if every individual
start
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buying
car
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the car
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of his own, each car would be for each person, and there
will
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be a lot of
traffic
jam
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in
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the
road
.
For example
, in Mumbai, India, everyone has their own vehicle and that causes a huge
traffic
jam on the roads. One of the possible
solution
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of
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these problems would be not granting
driver's
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a driver's
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license without proper testing. If a driver has
full
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, valid license, there is
a
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less possibility of
accident
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an accident
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.
In addition
, the government and different agencies should come forward, and start
awareness
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an awareness
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campaign, which would promote using public
transports
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transport
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instead
of personal
cars
. Public
transports
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transport
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can carry at least 10 to 20 passengers at a time, and that will mitigate the number of vehicles on the
road
.
For instance
, in Japan, numerous awareness campaigns about using public transport
,
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has
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significantly reduced the
vehicles
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number of vehicles
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on the
road
and
traffic
jam
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jams
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.
To conclude
, not knowing
driving
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how to drive
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fully
however
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, buying
first
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car is the cause of
road
accidents and death. Several awareness campaigns will help to reduce the number of
cars
in
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on
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the
road
.
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