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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
#information #families #country #income
The chart provides information about the average amount of money that households in a country spend each week between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, the percentage of income spent
for
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 food in 1968 was the highest
while
the
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leisure was the most popular in 2018 based on the given proportion.
However
, the cost of fuel and power
were
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 the lowest in both time periods. Having looked at the chart for more details, in 1968,
it is clear that
 more than one-third of most families's profits were for food which is the biggest spent of the total wages.
In contrast
, families in that time stage usually
afforted
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afforded
 only more than 5%
for
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resourses
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resources
 including fuel and power in returns.
Furthermore
, in the surveyed timeframe, other means of living
such
 as
households
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household
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 goods, personal products,
transports
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transport
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 and
housings
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housing
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,
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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 and
footwares
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footwear
footwears
 were the most substantial
fugure
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figure
 which accounted for around 7% and 10%, respectively. In terms of
latter
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 year, the figure for leisure surpassed the food ones, which accounted for around 22%,
genarally
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generally
makes
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 up the largest component. The share of outfits, personal products,
resources
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and resources
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were
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 around 4% to 5% in
the
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apply
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2018.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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