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The graphs below show the number of calls a company received at their Nigerian and Indian call centres in connection wit hthe various cae models they produce.

The graphs below show the number of calls a company received at their Nigerian and Indian call centres in connection wit hthe various cae models they produce.
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The previous bar chart illustrates the
amount
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 of people who made calls to a Nigerian call centre regarding different types of cars they manufactured in the years 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that there was a certain decrease in the number of calls made in the
year
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 2010 to 2015 in almost every car
model
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, except for only one.
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,
model
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 D remained the most popular (
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 with some decline)
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model
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B
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 remained the lowest for both years. In detail, in the
year
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 2015, the proportion of calls declined for almost every kind of car (A,
B
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,D,E) except for "C" which increased from 71 to 84.
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B
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 got the biggest drop from 33 to 24. Even though car type D kept its popularity, it
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 exhibited a decrease from 94 in the
year
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 2010 to 88 in the
year
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 2015.
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model
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B
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 fell 9 calls, showing a number of 24.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, model, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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