The line graph below shows the number of cell phone subscribers in a particular city, by gender. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph below shows the number of cell phone subscribers in a particular city, by gender.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph compares the amount of cell phone subscribers in an unknown town, between
men
and
women
, over a period of 20
years
.
It is clear that
there was a rapid increase in
men
's and
women
's usage of cell phones before 2005.
However
, after that, the number of female cell phone subscribers noticeably shrank till 2010.
Moreover
, gentlemen overtook ladies by 2005 and remained the same over the next
years
. In 1995,
women
were the major consumers of telephones, having slightly over 500 subscribers,
whereas
men
had only 500 telephone users. Over the next 10
years
, females rose steadily, increasing the initial value by 1,000 every 5
years
,
while
the number of
men
fluctuated and reached the same value as
women
. Between 2005 and 2010,
men
maintained the same level,
while
women
slightly dipped down over the period.
By contrast
, half a decade later, guys minimally grew to approximately 2,750 members, and
women
stagnated over the same gap.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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