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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the amount of three
typs
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types
 of fuel produced in 20
years
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 time interval from 1981 to 2000 in
UK
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the UK
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. It is clear from the graph that petroleum
were
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 the most type of fuel produced in
UK
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the UK
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thoughout
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throughout
 the
period
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. The petroleum
prduction
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production
level
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 experienced
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a noticable
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noticable
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noticeable
 variation
started
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 at 90 in 1981then remained stable at 140 from1984 to 1987.
after
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this
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peak
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this
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 figure had dropped to reach 100 in 1990
then
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 increased gradually until the end of the
period
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.
In
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 the other hand, coal
stated
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started
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 the
period
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 with
constant
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a constant
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level
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 of
ptoduction
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production
 for three
years
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 at 80
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falled
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 down to just under 40 in 1984 followed it with
slight
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a slight
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rase
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rise
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at
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to
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 60
im
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in
 1986. After
that
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that,
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 It went
though
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through
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downward
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a downward
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 fluctuation until it
had
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reached 30 in 2000. For natural gas, there was 10
years
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period
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 of stability around 40
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level
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levels
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 of
ptoduction
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production
.
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 to other 10
years
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 of
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considerable
cosiderable
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considerable
 growth
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that
thar
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that
 had arrived
to
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at
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 100
level
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 of
prouduction
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production
 in 2000>

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, period, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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