The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates
though
which the Correct your spelling
through
sugar
canes
is produced. Fix the agreement mistake
cane
Overall
, there are 7 steps to produce sugars, from planting the crops
to drying and cooling mechanism, and produce
Wrong verb form
producing
sugar
ready to consume.
According to
the picture, initially
, the crops
sugar
are planted around 12-18, then
after they grow successfully, the sugar
crops
will be harvested. There are 2 ways of harvesting sugar
cane; first harvest it manually by farmers by chopping the sugar
plants, meanwhile the other one is by using special harvesting tractors that can harvest far faster in a large amount of crops
sugar
.
After being harvested, the sugar
canes are squeezed in a crushing machine
to produce juice and separate it from the residue. Having been purified through a limestone filter, the purified juice then
put into an evaporator Add a missing verb
is then
machine
in
a high temperature to gain a solid syrup. Before being dried and cooled in a Change preposition
at
machine
box, the syrup is processed in a high-speed centrifuge machine
, the function is to separate the crystals from the syrup. Finally
, after the crystals are separated, dried and cooled, then
the sugar
is ready for consumption.Submitted by pratiwi.fadhilah11 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, crops, machine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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