Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations. Others think that it is practical aid and advice that is needed. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

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Some would argue that developing
nations
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need
finacial
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financial

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help from
international
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government
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.
While
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others say that only
advice
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is needed to them .
Although
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,
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apply

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providing
right
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the right

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direction with a piece of
advice
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give
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gives

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them a good start ,
but
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apply

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I believe financial
support
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would benefit developing
nations
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to start
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project
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projects

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with good success. On the one hand , people argue that it would be better to get practical aid or
advice
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from
international
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the international

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government
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. By asking
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advice
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for advice

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from organizations , developing
country
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countries

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can start planning something new for the citizens of the country but
could not
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cannot

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complete
if
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it if

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developing
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the developing
a developing

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nation
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nations

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does
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do

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not have enough
sources
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resources

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.
For example
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, the
government
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of
india
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India

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seek
for
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apply

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advice
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from the United
Nation
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Nations

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associated with the infrastructure of rural areas
school
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schools

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.
However
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, the
india
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Indian
India

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government
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took the
advice
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but could not start the
project
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regarding
development
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the development

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of schools in rural areas because of
lack
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a lack

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of
sources
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resources

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.
Therefore
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, I believe that
finacial
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financial

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support
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is much important
that
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than

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verbal
support
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. On
other
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the other

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hand , developing
nations
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like India
asks
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ask

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for financial
support
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from the WHO in order to
suppply
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supply

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Covid-19 medicine all over the world . Because of
this
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support
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lives of many individuals
saves
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save

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that time
as well as
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basic essentials like
blanket
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blankets

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,
water
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and water

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supply to those people who were not able
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support
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to support

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themselves .
Therefore
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, I believe that
fund
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is really important for developing
nations
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to complete
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project
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projects

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overseas .
For example
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, the
indian
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government
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transfer goods internationally with the help of
finacial
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financial

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support
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from
international
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the international

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organization
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organizations

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and these goods help them to make some profit for themselves in order to spend money on the health of their citizens.
Thus
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,
finacial
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financial

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support
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plays a vital role in the welfare of
economy
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the economy

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. In conclusion , some
argues
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argue

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practical aid is important
while
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others
says
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say

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that developing countries need
finacial
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financial

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support
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from international organizations . I believe that
finacial
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financial

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support
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plays a vital role
to initiate
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in initiating

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the
project
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and
help
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helping

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in completion rather than making plans on the board.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • developing countries
  • financial help
  • international organizations
  • practical aid
  • technical assistance
  • vocational training
  • sustainable development
  • dependency
  • misuse
  • corruption
  • empower communities
  • local skills
  • targeted solutions
  • flexibility
  • capacity-building
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