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The plan below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today

#plan #show #harbour
The diagram illustrates changes
at
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in
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Porth
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the Porth
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 Harbour
plan
 in 2000 and how
its
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it
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looking
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looks
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 now.
Overall
, some new developments were added and
few
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a few
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 thing things were removed as per details from the
plan
. In 2000, Porth Harbour
comprises
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comprised
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of
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a castle located at the
south east
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southeast
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 of the
plan
 which was disused, there was
also
 a private beach used by the hotel, and a lifeboat close to the cafes and shops.
In addition
, there were
also
 car
park
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parks
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 and fishing boats at the
south
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southwest
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west
 corner of the
plan
.
Furthermore
, the
plan
also
 showed a marina with private yachts,
carpark
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a carpark
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, and toilets at the
north
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northwest
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west
 corner.
While
, at the northern side of the
plan
 contains a public beach, passenger and a dock. Today, some changes
has
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 been made
due to
 the renovation of the harbour. The
castel
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castle
 which was disused has been replaced by a hotel,
while
 the
the
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apply
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marina private yachts on the
north
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northwest
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west
 side
was
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were
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 swapped to the
south
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southwest
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west
 corner and the fishing boats were moved to the
north
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north-west
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west
, there was
also
 an addition of cafes and shops near the lifeboat building.
Moreover
, the dock was
also
 expanded with new
boat
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boats
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 added.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your essay.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words and cohesive devices to connect your ideas smoothly.
task achievement
Expand on your details with more specific examples to better illustrate the changes.
task achievement
You have successfully identified and described the key changes between the two time periods.
task achievement
Your essay covers all the significant changes in the harbour’s layout, which shows you have a good grasp of the visual information.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your essay follows a logical order, making it easy to follow the transitions and alterations.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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