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Computers these days can translate all kinds of language with great accuracy. Hence, our children will not need to learn more languages in the future. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times, computers can
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 all
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 of language with great carefulness.
Thus
, our young generations think might not
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 to study more
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languages
 in the future. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
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Firstly
, using the computer for
translation
 is highly efficient. It
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 of cultural
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 and appreciate different cultures.
Additionally
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 opportunities in the future.
For example
, study groups by international students to communicate online and
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 culture by owner country including
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interpreter
 for acknowledge.
Secondly
, the availability of online
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 tools has opened up new opportunities for communication across different languages.
While
 English is widely spoken, many countries use languages
such
 as Spanish , Chinese or Thai.
Furthermore
,
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 by computer
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 it easier to bridge
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language
 barriers and engage in conversations with people from different parts of the world without
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 more language. In conclusion, I strongly agree that
translation
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 methods help for understanding , appreciate different cultures , and provide
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cognitive benefits
  • globalized world
  • multilingual
  • bridge communication gaps
  • professional opportunities
  • machine translations
  • idiomatic expressions
  • context-sensitive
  • personal growth
  • fostering open-mindedness
  • perseverance
  • deeper connection
  • dependence on technology
  • regional accents
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