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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares the amount of various exported items from a nation between the two years, 2015 and 2016.
Overall
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, in the
beginning
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beginning,
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 period of time,the highest
value
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 was of petroleum
products
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 and the lowest was of
textiles
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whereas
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at the end
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 ,
along with
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 the petroleum
products
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, engineered goods were
also
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 sold at the same highest price and beside
textiles
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, agricultural
products
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 too were the cheapest and exported at the same price. From the graph, the
value
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 of petroleum
products
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 was as high as $60
billion
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 in the
year
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 2015. After a
year
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, it increased
further
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 by almost $2
billion
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. Not only
this
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 but
also
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 engineered goods
was
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were
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also
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 able to maintain the same
value
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 of nearly $62
billion
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 after making an increment of roughly $4
billion
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.
Similarly
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, in the previous
year
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,the cost of agricultural
products
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 outweighed
textiles
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 by approximately $
2billion
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2 billion
,
however
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,
textiles
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 rose to the same position in the following
year
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 by increasing
its'
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its
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value
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 by about $
4billion
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4 billion
.
Furthermore
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, gems and jewellery
was
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were
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 the only category that dropped
its
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their
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'
value
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 by about $
2billion
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2 billion
 and sold at $
40billion
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40 billion
 in the
year
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 2016.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, products, textiles, billion, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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