The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library.

The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library.
The pie charts illustrate how
undergraduates
and postgraduates assess satisfactory levels
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the variety of books and non-printed materials.
Overall
,
while
the majority of
undergraduates
consider two
criterias
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criteria
to get the highest level of satisfaction, the minority was said to have not up to
expectation
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experience.
Additionally
, satisfied
experience
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experiences
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had the highest number of feed feedback by
postgraduate
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, whilst the opposite case was for not satisfied ones. Regarding the data of the various genres of books, the proportion of
undergraduates
had
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satisfaction
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and very good experience
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relatively similar, about 35%, and the figure for not good
experiences
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lower, at 28%.
However
, half of postgraduates feel the variation of books is not good, which was double that of very good and satisfied feelings, with 22 and 28%. Turning to the non-printed materials,
while
above 60% of
undergraduates
rate the diversity to be very good,
this
percentage was true for the
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experiences
by postgraduates. The percentage of satisfaction for
undergraduates
is almost double the figures for not good
experiences
(20% and 12%), the figures for graduates
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opposite
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, with 12% for very good and 22% for satisfactory
experiences
.
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