The pie charts show the results of a survey in which undergraduates and postgraduates were asked about the range of books and non-printed materials in their school library.
The pie charts illustrate how
undergraduates
and postgraduates assess satisfactory levels on
the variety of books and non-printed materials.
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Overall
, while
the majority of undergraduates
consider two criterias
to get the highest level of satisfaction, the minority was said to have not up to Correct your spelling
criteria
expectation
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expectations
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, satisfied experience
had the highest number of feed feedback by Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
postgraduate
, whilst the opposite case was for not satisfied ones.
Regarding the data of the various genres of books, the proportion of Fix the agreement mistake
postgraduates
undergraduates
had
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who had
satisfaction
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the satisfaction
were
relatively similar, about 35%, and the figure for not good Change the verb form
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experiences
are
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However
, half of postgraduates feel the variation of books is not good, which was double that of very good and satisfied feelings, with 22 and 28%.
Turning to the non-printed materials, while
above 60% of undergraduates
rate the diversity to be very good, this
percentage was true for the not good
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not-good
experiences
by postgraduates. The percentage of satisfaction for undergraduates
is almost double the figures for not good experiences
(20% and 12%), the figures for graduates was
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were
opposite
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the opposite
experiences
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